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Breathe in the cold December air,
Life's a bitch and nothings fair.
I'll walk away and see you there...
So there...

If Death's a gift, I'm on a roll;
Black of heart and black of soul.
I've relinquished all my control,
My soul...

This life it mocks and laughs at me,
A dissilution, I don't want to be
But something here screams "Fallacy"
At me...

By mornings dawn o'er stars I'll fly,
So listen out to hear my cry,
This is what it means to give up and die.
Don't cry...

I loved and lost and loved once more,
But now I feel I can love no more,
For life has closed all her doors
For sure...

For now I scream unto the stars
I run and jump, journey afar.
And now I fail again- Hurrah!
Hurrah...

I'm sick and tired of playing games,
Trying hard just to fail again,
Every time the outcome's same;
Full of pain...

Just face it your a loser,
You were born to lose it all.
An effigy of what shouldn't be,
An idol built to fall.

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What It Means To Give Up And Die

If only I had the strength...

Warning, highly emotional content. Don't have a go at me if this sounds emo, if it does, don't tell me, I'd rather NOT know.
This is raw emotion. I've started singing randomly, and I'm writing it out as I go along.
It's gonna be crap, but it's pure emotion of how I feel right now...

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~uncopyrightedvinegar Dec 10, 2005  Hobbyist Artist
Yep. Hehe I'm going to stop posting useless random comments now :P. Great work though.
niz xxx
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~Yllek Dec 10, 2005   Writer
Lol, thanks! :)
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:iconuncopyrightedvinegar:
~uncopyrightedvinegar Dec 10, 2005  Hobbyist Artist
Yep, I love the different ways you can use whispers to make a point, and add extra info.
They're great ^_^.
niz xxx
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~Yllek Dec 10, 2005   Writer
It's a way of making a mood.
:)
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~uncopyrightedvinegar Dec 9, 2005  Hobbyist Artist
It's amazing!
One tiny thing to point out:

"Just face it your a loser,
You were born to lose it all.
An effigy of what shouldn't be,
An idol built to fall. "

"Your" should be "you're" lol.

Oh I love the way you repeat bits, as whispers. Perfect XD.
niz xxx
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~Yllek Dec 10, 2005   Writer
Thank you!
Whispers are a keen part of my songs, I like the eerie effects you can achieve, the lingering thoughts like the lingering spirits of long departed... :p
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:iconpunxrose:
I love the raw emotion of this! The power and passion is incredible.
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~Yllek Dec 9, 2005   Writer
Thanks :)
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:iconamaranthiasage:
I loved it.

i could almost feel what you felt. the power in your anguish.
your utterly hopeless grap at something meaningfull enough to keep you here.
it's beautiful, yet mierable at the same time.

the despair and love loss is moving.

IT"S BEAUTIFUL.....

i wont lie, i almost cried while i was reading it.
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~Yllek Dec 8, 2005   Writer
Thanks.:)
It's comments like that that give hope in such hours of darkness.
I'm not saying I do it for the comments, or even that a lot of my pieces deserve them, but when they come, they help.
Thank you.:)

And thanks for the :+fav:
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